Daily Learning Target(s): Students will be able to...
relate and apply resources as evidenced by working in a group to create an awareness campaign.
Due Today: Teacher will collect the following-
Stringy sentences have too many independent clauses strung together with words like and or but:
Stringy: Lucia baited the hook, and she cast the line into the water, and she watched the float bob up and down, and the float suddenly disappeared beneath the surface.
Revised: After Lucia baited the hook, she cast the line into the water. As she watched the float bob p and down, it suddenly disappeared beneath the surface.
Wordy sentences use more words than are really needed:
Wordy: After we had eaten our breakfast, we packed our gear and headed for the slopes.
Revised: After breakfast, we packed our gear and headed for the slopes.
Edit the following sentences by copying them exactly as you see them, then crossing out and editing to show revisions.
Annie Oakley became famous because of the fact that she starred in Buffalo Bill's Wild West Show.
Annie was young, and she entered a shooting match with Frank Butler, and Butler was a professional sharpshooter, and Annie won the match.
In the show, Annie ran into the ring, and she picked up a gun, and she shattered glass balls in midair, and this feat showed her great skill.
CSE Groups:
Keep electronics put away unless you are using them specifically for CSE Projects!
All group members should be working. Nothing to do? Beowulf!
Daily Learning Target(s): Students will be able to...
Due Today: Teacher will collect the following-
Homework:
Important Deadlines/Reminders:
- Have supplies needed to work on senior project.
Agenda- Grammar: Revising Stringy and Wordy Sentences
- Stringy sentences have too many independent clauses strung together with words like and or but:
- Stringy: Lucia baited the hook, and she cast the line into the water, and she watched the float bob up and down, and the float suddenly disappeared beneath the surface.
- Revised: After Lucia baited the hook, she cast the line into the water. As she watched the float bob p and down, it suddenly disappeared beneath the surface.
- Wordy sentences use more words than are really needed:
- Wordy: After we had eaten our breakfast, we packed our gear and headed for the slopes.
- Revised: After breakfast, we packed our gear and headed for the slopes.
Edit the following sentences by copying them exactly as you see them, then crossing out and editing to show revisions.